At primary school, Bill Clinton’s teacher asked about his future job, he said to the teacher that he wanted to become the president of the United States of American. His teacher and classmates laughed at him. They told him not to have daydream.” You are stupid, president”! But he did not care about what they had done. Finally, he is the Owner of the WHITE HOUSE, a very talented president. Bill Clinton has succeeded for he has a firm belief in himself. So, you will get what you are expecting when you are yourself.
FULL NAME:TRAN PHUONG NAM
CLASS:081202A
ID:08120021
Giới thiệu về tôi
- Trần Phương Nam
- TOI KHONG SO NHUNG GI SAP TOI MA TOI CHI SO NHUNG GI DA QUA.
Grammar is good
Trả lờiXóaIdea is good
Logical is fair
Coherence is fair
Unity is good
Thesis statement is good
I think that the way you begin your writing is good: the story is interesting but it too far to come thesis statement
I think you should write more in body paragraph to make your outline more specific
grammar:good
Trả lờiXóaleading:special, persuasive
thesis statement:i'm a little confused, the leading makes me think that if you believe yourself with a firm standpoint you can get what you are expecting. But the last sentence said: "you will get what you are expecting when you are yourself"